There was an old man called Matt from Manitoba
Who went with a guy called Leo from Laos
But along came Barry from Blarney
Who took a fancy to Leo from Laos
So Matt from Manitoba got in a huff
And they all ended up playing Blind Man's Buff
There was an old man called Matt from Manitoba
Who went with a guy called Leo from Laos
But along came Barry from Blarney
Who took a fancy to Leo from Laos
So Matt from Manitoba got in a huff
And they all ended up playing Blind Man's Buff
Is this an attempt at a limerick? Here's a real limerick by way of example (dedicated to arsenal)Originally Posted by gerefan2
The Bishop of Central Japan
Used to bugger himself with a fan
When taxed with his acts
He explained "It expands and contracts
So much more than a man"
As you can see, a limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines. The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm. The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables, and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.
snotface (October 8th, 2018)
We can all quote from Yourdictionay.....
http://examples.yourdictionary.com/l...-examples.html
arsenal (October 8th, 2018)
Let me play.
There once was a member called frequent.
Who thinks all his posts are so piquant.
He trolls from the dawn.
Making everyone yawn.
And is thought of as senile delinquent.
It's fun but good luck ryming 'arsenal'.
gerefan2 (October 8th, 2018)
There is a man here known as Scotty.
Who's obsessed with all things from his botty.
But when he's called scat.
Well he doesn't like that.
So he sniffs and then gets all snotty.
Unfortunately as a limerick it’s a fail. It would start to pass muster if the second line was “who thinks all his posts so piquant”. However the most glaring fault is your obsession with putting a "." at the end of each line. A limerick is more often than not a single sentence. In the above attempt there could arguable be a "." at the end of the second line but definitely not otherwise. Consequently 6/10 and “must try harder”
This one is arguably better but there's still the obsession with the "." This one might get you a 8/10 were it not for the second last line; no educated person uses "Well" in such a way and is almost certainly superfluous. As a limerick the two lines are perfectly acceptable as:
"But when he's called scat
He doesn't like that."
The "So" at the beginning of the last line is also superfluous and again an example of the tendency of uneducated people to begin sentences with "So" when it doesn't add anything to the meaning, as in "So I was reading SGT one day". I don't think we can describe you as having attended Slough Comprehensive, successfully or otherwise. I imagine you as being at some minor prep school like Kings Mead and then god knows where you ended up next but doubtless somewhere that you spent your days not in the classroom but bossing the school cadet corps along the lines made famous by Douglas Neidermeyer in Animal House
Again, I think you're back to 6/10 and "must try harder"
You can't ryme 'arsenal' can you. Disappointed.
Life is full of disappointments if you set yourself up to fail with great expectations. That's why reading SGT is such a delight for me - I have no need to lower my expectations of posters; they're at rock bottom already
But apparently "we" find it impossible to acknowledge that mine were the only useful posts in your thread about your Will. An inconvenient truth?
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